留学文书指导|土建专业从三峡大坝谈起可还行！

曼彻斯特大学在2018年的QS世界排名中雄踞第34位，在英国仅次于G5和爱丁堡大学，排在第7位。它拥有英国最大的校园，吸引了来自160个国家的39,700名学生，尤其是在中国留学生中，曼大的知名度非常高。

作为一所综合大学，曼彻斯特大学的很多学科都非常优秀，商科中的金融专业、MBA和人力资源管理是其金字招牌。前身是曼彻斯特大学理工的曼大，在理工类专业上底子向来不错，今日将与大家分享成功拿到曼大土木工程专业offer的文书一篇。

专业：土木工程

Offer：巴斯大学 曼彻斯特大学 布里斯托大学 伦敦大学学院

The Three Gorges Dam, the 2335m concrete wonder holding back 39.3 cu km of water, powering 9 provinces and 2 cities, slows down the rotation of the earth by 0.06 microseconds. It is testament to the awesome potential of Civil Engineering to reshape the environment, push the boundaries of physical possibilities while making a real impact by solving practical problems and ultimately, engineer awe-inspiring contributions. My interest in Civil Engineering was prompted at a young age when I had the opportunity to visit six of the tallest buildings in the world including the Petronas Twin Towers, the Empire State Building and the Taipei 101. Each of these are monuments to humanity's progress. I am attracted by the prospect of being able to translate abstract ideas into physical reality, and of using science to realise innovative solutions. I seek the opportunity to combine my creativity and interest in Physics to create. I want to make a lasting difference and leave behind a legacy.

This interest led me to do a work attachment with an engineering firm in Malaysia. There I observed the construction of a bituminous road over swampy land. It required problem-solving skills and tenacity as the project was obstructed by the tropical weather. For two stimulating weeks, I shadowed the civil engineers. I saw how they solved problems and dealt with building regulations, the need for planning, design and accurate measurement. I saw how good leadership, communication and teamwork skills were required. I saw the bond and appreciation of how important their work is. During this time, I also visited a factory which supplied tempered glass to the firm for their other projects. I was fascinated by the process and was impressed by how engineers across different fields often work together to achieve the same objectives.

Importantly, I believe my skills and interests provide a strong foundation for a career in Civil Engineering. Besides my keen undertaking of Maths, Chemistry and Physics, other facets of my character continue to develop. In school, I gained leadership, teamwork and organisational skills: I was the Director of Community Service of the Interact Club (a volunteer and charitable club), Vice President of the Malaysian Society in college, President of the Moral Club (where I organised projects to help the environment), and a committee member of the Eco Club. My involvement in these community and environment centred societies stems from my desire to make change - this same desire underpins my interest in Civil Engineering. The skills I gained led to me being appointed as a Prefect and member of the Student Council - roles which allow me to raise issues concerning the student body and improve my college. My proactive nature compels me towards these roles and will similarly compel me to be proactively involved in my prospective university and career.

With regard to extracurricular activities, I have always been active: I successfully participated in numerous intra and inter school athletic competitions. I was commended by the Sports Master and was invited to be a member of the Athletics Club. I am also passionate about football and I enjoy playing as a team. Competition and sport have taught me to persevere in the face of adversity and to challenge myself. Outside of sport, I have also directed two stage performances for National Day competitions and won both. I enjoy a creative outlet which the stage provides, and which I believe Civil Engineering will also provide.

For these reasons, I believe I have the materials necessary to succeed in Civil Engineering. Therefore to build the road upon which I shall traverse to success and the tower which I shall use to climb to new heights, I welcome the opportunity for the support and foundation that a university education in the UK can provide.

1. 纵观整篇文书，申请者安排的内容全面且结构完美，首段以故事引入主题，第二段重点谈在马来西亚的工程工作，第三段是在专业上的学识积累和活动上的傲人成绩，第四段则是兴趣爱好，最后展望与升华。

2. 在首段中，申请者谈到了举世闻名的水利工程——三峡大坝，阐释其对人类生活与环境的贡献，接着谈到自己从小的阅历，引出对土建热爱之情的由来，并展现出美好追求。

3. 在这篇文书中，一大亮点是申请者精心选择了在马来西亚工程公司的工作经验做重点阐释，这一工作极好地展示了申请者丰富的实践经验，申请者着重谈了收获与成长。

4. 第三段，申请者大量堆积了自己在活动中的各种头衔，在这里，除了真的有足够资本去炫耀，小编还是建议大家不要挖坑给自己跳。着重选一个活动来谈自己的认识及收获就非常好了，注意要与本专业产生联系。

5. 整篇文书看下来是非常顺畅的，需要注意的是申请者在其中省去了在土建学科上的理论学习状况和成绩，如果要省去这一部分，建议在其他部分突出表现学术上的能力。